How to write a lede

WASHINGTON — The Supreme Court on Monday turned down without comment a request from the Obama administration to reconsider a major immigration decision.

(As it started out after the decision was announced. Doesn’t tell the reader much.)

 

WASHINGTON — TheA short-handed Supreme Court on Monday turned down without comment a request from the Obama administration to reconsider a major immigration decision.

(Deleting an unimportant detail, and adding a slightly less unimportant detail.)

 

WASHINGTON — A short-handed Supreme Court on Monday turned down a request from the Obama administration to reconsider a major immigration decision, dooming for now President Obama’s plan to spare millions of undocumented immigrants from deportation.

(Aha. Now we see why it’s important, in 14 more words.)

 

The Supreme Court on Monday rejected a request to reconsider a challenge to President Obama’s plan to spare millions of undocumented immigrants from deportation and allow them to work legally in the United States.

(As it’s confusingly blurbed on Google; that can be read as, “Challenge rejected again, plan goes through.”)

 

WASHINGTON — A short-handed Supreme Court on Monday turned down a request from the Obama administration to reconsider a major immigration decision, dooming for now President Obama’s plan to spare millions of undocumented immigrants from deportation.

(As it now appears on the Times site.)

(New York Times, Google and NewsDiffs)

 

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